It's sad to see you end this. You still had avenues to go with the Sarge, especially with him being an experiment an d all, but i can't blame you for ending it with this if you don't like the way the character is playing out. I hear about writers in comics all the time leaving the book because they didn't like where the character development was leading.
The source of where the virus came from. Good idea. But my execution of it was bad. And then to have him command the undead? Again, good idea, bad execution. The only way to explain his ability to command the undead is to use magic, and DR purists hate the thought of magic in this part of the megaverse.
While i understand it is your story i do disagree, i felt it was fine. (i really liked trying to figure things out.
) I'll never understand why the idea of this version of the zombiepocalypse being created by magic is so thought of in a negative manner. It was Citizen Lazlo's first glimpse of DR in the Rifter that got me VERY interested. It was a whole new concept and one that didn't involve either the unknown ("i don't know what caused this") or science gone wrong (T-virus and other things) The fact that a cult did this to try to bring a Demon Lord over to our plane was a fresh idea IMHO and the fact that it turned into a zombiepocalypse was just the cherry on top, but i guess to each their own...
Still Leon, this was great while it lasted, and you do deserve a break. Will be on the lookout for your next story. Until then you take care, keep you affairs in order and of corse, do keep the Mrs happy.